Hey Bill... just a few things for you.
The First Page:
-I actually like the red, white and blue theme, but the black letters don't show up too well on the blue side, so I agree, a little tweaking with some of the colors is needed.
-Is the blue tee shirt in the upper left your logo? I'm not really digging that too much. Something about the lettering is too varied for me, and even tho the colors in the tee are the reds and blues from the background, something about it isn't coordinating in the spot it's in. I don't know why.
-I think your first page should have the company name instead of Custom Apparel, Decoration.... etc. It's nice to see the company name right at the top of the first page, and then the first paragraph to start off as "Welcome to.... ".
-The veribage looks a little basic just as black text. Is there anyway to jazz up the lettering, just a little?
-That is great that you are going to update the picture. Wrinkly clothes are not big attractors. When you do update the photos, make sure the background of the pic coordinates with the whole color scheme of the website itself.
-Haha, I know you have a great sense of humor, but maybe insinuating they'll still be good looking loser's in your shirts isn't the hook you want to toss out there, lol, then again, maybe it is!
I might play along the lines that your shirts are champion quality, for their champion bound teams. Your shirts will present them as champions all the way to the Championships! You know?
About us page:
-Think about taking the term "won't break the bank out", it makes you sound like a discount shirt seller. Everyone's idea of "won't break the bank" is different. I'd use the term "at affordable pricing". That leaves you room to be better priced, but still earn a profit, and hopefully avoiding potential problems with price haggling - to ensure you don't break *their* bank, cause everyone's banks are different.
- Also consider removing that you started out as a hobby, only last year! That implied to me you started this with an iron in your kitchen, and now you want to make my shirts? Just leave it out.
Remove the section starting with and including the words "started" and up to "into" and replace that section with the words: "We are". That reads much better.
- Watch your puncuation on this page. There's a missing period.
- Take out the section of words in the last blurb that says "If you ever want"
Services page:
I think those links should be on page ONE!
I think you would be able to combine the services page and the front page into one page and lose the services page. What you *do* should be right on the very first page in case that is the only *face time* you get with your visitor.
Sorry, Bill, it was longer than I expected, but I am only trying to help out the best I can. Good luck with everything, and I hope the site brings you alot of new biz.
