 Re: Ok, I'm getiing frustrated
Andi,
First of all, I like the idea and the basic design of the site. One thing I did notice however is lots of misspelllings and the wrong choice of words i.e. your instead of you're, quite instead of quit etc. I saw those sorts of mistakes sprinkled through every page at which I looked. You really need to get someone to proofread the site for you. I know how it is when you've looked at the same text 500 times. It becomes really hard to see the misspelled words and small mistakes yourself.
Also, one thing that I thought was odd was the text underneath the design. In a couple of places, at least in my browser (IE7) the text that was detailing the slogan cut off in the middle of the slogan. The main one I noticed was "I'll support leaving Iraq when..." I'd recommend figuring out a way to make sure the entire slogan shows. Otherwise it just looks sloppy.
Also, you need to work on the text that you use to introduce the various sections. You haven't yet changed all the text so that the site name is the same all the way through. If the site is now called Military Mind than all the text on the pages should reflect that. You're also going a little whacky with the capitals. Unless you're writing a title, I would only put capitals where they belong in a sentence. Also, as far as the text goes, I get the idea for which you seem to be aiming, that your clothes are both fashionable and patriotic, but I'm not sure you've expressed it as well as you might have done.
I'm a writer, and a marketer, so I tend to be really tough when it comes to the written word on web sites. If you're open to some help in this area, PM me, and I'll give you some suggestions. |