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guest5779 · January 7th, 2007

It's my garment information and sizing section. I need help rewriting this... it just doesn't sound right.

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All designs are printed on Hanes 6.1oz Beefy Tees.

These 100% cotton shirts are preshrunk, ring-spun, and double hemmed; assuring superior quality and longevity.
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The second sentence might be too complicated. Plus, I need this to be an easy read for international customers. Any help? Thanks!

Jasonda · January 7th, 2007

The second sentence is too technical and wordy. I'd go with:

These shirts are made of soft, 100% ring-spun cotton. They have a relaxed fit.

That's about all anyone will need to know.

guest5779 · January 7th, 2007

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Originally Posted by Jasonda


	The second sentence is too technical and wordy. I'd go with: These shirts are made of soft, 100% ring-spun cotton. They have a relaxed fit. That's about all anyone will need to know.

Thank you. Anyone else as well?

Solmu · January 8th, 2007

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Originally Posted by empyre_01d2


	Anyone else as well?

I agree with Jasonda; the other information largely won't mean anything to customers. Better to keep it simple. You might throw "preshunk" into her description, but that's about it.

Rodney · January 8th, 2007

Sometimes customers might need to be told that the shirt is high quality or if it's heavyweight or lightweight (since 6.1 oz won't mean much to many)

I would say something like "...high quality, preshrunk heavyweight, ringspun (oh yeah, that means super duper soft) Hanes Beefy T-shirts". You might need to tighten that up a bit or use your own language

guest5779 · January 8th, 2007

Thank you all!

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